Story Starters - Desciptive Writing

 WALT- understand the authors purpose and deeper messages

My Story

Big vs Bigger

As Sean and Steve floated up in to the clouds, sean shouted,

“This is all your fault if it wasn’t for you we wouldn’t be up here in the first place”

As they floated up into space they saw lots of lost people who ate the mysterious chicken nuggets from those little kids. They were just laughing down there watching as they floated up and from their point of view they just kept getting smaller until they finally disappeared, which means they must have gone too high. 

As Sean and Steve floated up they made a plan to work together and pop themselves or as Sean thought that was a plane. AS they held hands going to a poppy popper thingy Steve let go off Sean and pushed him away from the poppy popper thingy.  As Steve floated down to earth, Sean shouted 

“ STEVE HOW DARE YOU”  they could hear that scream all the way down to earth but only as a faint yell. As Steve went down the weird kids asked where Sean was… “ he's in a good place now”

Steve was acting all weird when he got back down to earth. He grew  shrap purple prickles down his back, his tongue grew long and went black, his eyes went orange and his knees grew nobbly, he grew a long mouse like tail and horns like a buffalo. As the weird kids saw him grow they all screamed in terror. When all that pain and suffering went, they swallowed all of the weird kids. 1 by 1 they went down and were never to be seen again....

My Learning

We watched a video of somestory starters and then we had to make a ending about it. I was good at not mixing the names up with Sean and Steve. I was not good at making Steve scary at the end. I enjoyed making Steve sound scary. I enjoyed everything about it. I want the readers to comment on how they liked the story and if I could make it better and how I would do that.